Contrast

This is a collaborative poem for Jilly’s September challenge. Frank wrote the first half of a double haibun. It took me a long time to come up with a way to finish it, but I am pleased with how this turned out. It might be a little too repetitive, but I hope I did the first half justice. Frank’s half is in bold, and my additions are in purple.


 Autumn changes focus on school schedules and condo movements, but now for our children, not for us. It’s the same with Spring. In between these events, like sunlight going through the leaves of trees, there is viewing the lake and parkways where trees can reach for the sun because the buildings are small enough for them to have a chance.

LIGHT THROUGH PATIENT TREES
BUILDINGS BLOCK THE AUTUMN SKY
BOTH PROVIDE COOL SHADE

Spring changes focus on school breaks and colorful flowers and the return of chirping birds, more for the world than for us. It’s the opposite of Autumn. In between these events, the sunlight goes through the leaves of trees, and our children pursue their dreams, while we live through them vicariously.

SEASONS CHANGE, NEW COMES

FOR OUR CHILDREN NOT FOR US

BIRDS RETURN, PLANTS GROW

2 thoughts on “Contrast

  1. Finally reading, Jenna, and I must say, this is wonderfully done! You kept the spirit of it so well; love the living vicariously part. I just posted my version of Frank’s Challenge and found it so satisfying to follow him. I have also written the 2nd half of your challenge and will get it posted tomorrow. 🙂

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