Loving Deeply the Day

You are
My happiness —
Simply to stay with you
Is peace, is freedom, is loving
Deeply.

This
Is sadness:
When we even feel
Far away, too slowly comes
Day.


For DVerse, we are working on contrapuntal poetry. I am not sure if I did it right, but my intention was to take 2 poems and put them together into a third poem. Each stanza can stand alone. I also tried to provide contrast both in the subject matter and form of both stanzas: The first is a cinquain, and the second is an oddquain.

4 thoughts on “Loving Deeply the Day

  1. Contrapuntal requies that you weave the melodies or in this case lines…so it would work if you wrote….

    You are
    This
    My happiness —
    Is sadness:
    Simply to stay with you
    When we even feel
    Is peace, is freedom, is loving
    Far away, too slowly comes
    Deeply.
    Day.

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