This is a collaboration with Frank Hubeny, whose poem “Park Shade” provided a lot of inspiration. It is a Chaucerian stanza, iambic pentameter with a rhyme scheme of ababbcc. I enjoyed trying this unfamiliar form, and Frank’s original gets better with every reading. For Jilly’s October collaboration challenge.
You grew in what became a picnic grove
Providing shade to what is now a park
While dying you were cut and when I drove
One morning past your place expecting dark
I found the stump, your tombstone, your new mark
And knew eventually that so will I
Look up with new perspective on the sky.
I took for granted your inviting shade,
Your stately trunk and verdant, kindly leaves,
A vacuum where I’d expectations made,
An unexpected absence nature grieves,
Much worse than winter’s cold, and icy eaves.
In winter’s bitter cold will our tears freeze
Time before such loss brings us to our knees?
Really nice! I especially loved “A vacuum where I’d expectations made.”
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Very nice–what we take for granted is suddenly gone. That can bring us to our knees. Thank you for writing a second half to this!
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You did well here – love
‘Time before such loss brings us to our knees? ‘
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Ooo – will our tears freeze? This is well done and I’m so glad you have joined in again, my friend! I completed this one over coffee this morning – will post it a bit later. Your writing expands and grows with each passing day; love being a part of your journey 🙂
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Thank you so much!
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Very well done! You took it places unimagined, and that’s the way poetry is done!
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Thank you!
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